6.5分复议到8分的反馈（含考场文章）
我是2月份预测班的学员，在顾爸爸的建议下，我的写作从6.5复议到了8分，终于可以去dream school了。
2月份上预测班的时候，其实特别痛苦，而且正好是过年假期，自己真的是过了个假年，卯足了劲跟着顾爸爸备考，辛苦了好久，当得到结果还是6.5的时候，我的内心是崩溃的，我真的特别想放弃，但是顾爸爸真的是救了我，他的课有一个复议帖，就是你可以尽量回忆考场上的作文发给他看，他会对你是否复议，能复议到多少分给一个非常中肯的建议。我抱着试一试的态度，把作文发给了顾爸爸，他建议我复议，我果断的听了顾爸爸的话，而且那句“我觉得7分没有问题”重拾了我的信心。从这个结果来看，可能我在考场上遇到了不负责任的考官，但是我非常幸运，遇到了最好的老师，一个在考完试之后还可以给反馈的老师。
在等待复议结果的时候，我又报了一次预测班，我自己听课的状态发生了变化，第一次听的时候，完全是被动的，老顾说什么我尽量记下来，从来不思考；第二次听的时候，看到题目，想ABC，直接就冒出来英文词伙，和老顾一起思考，试着在YY上跟着老顾的思路一起写一起说，每天的课前课后作业写得很积极，感觉很充实，在等待复议结果的时候也不会很焦虑。上完第一次课，可能我还会期待在考场上遇到预测班的原题，但是上完第二次课，我觉得我遇到什么题目可能都差不多，因为我掌握的可能是方法。
我的屠鸭之旅终于结束了，这过程太煎熬，但是幸运的是我找到了顾爸爸这位良师！
这是3月13日该学生回忆的考场文章，我给的点评和建议。
Some people think that car free days can help decrease air pollution, but others think there are other ways to achieve this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Air pollution is an increasingly serious problem in many countries. Many people think that setting a car free day is an effective way to alleviate this problem, but I would argue that many other measures can be taken to improve poor air condition.
Theoretically, “car free day” campaigns can raise the awareness of citizens’ environmental protection and they will reduce the reliance on private cars. Many car users have not realised that the exhausted fumes from cars contribute a lot to the serious air pollution. On the car free day, the air quality may be improved as the number of cars on the road decreases steeply. In that case, those car users will be aware that they can breathe fresh air and improve physical fitness if they less use cars.
However, the feasibility of setting a car free day is questionable. The whole society cannot operate well since there are no cars on the road for daily commuting on that special day. For example, students who live far away from school may be late for class and some businessmen may miss out some important appointments due to the lack of cars. In addition, only one day without any cars on the road may fail to get rid of air pollutants significantly because daily car emissions cannot be reduced by such a one day policy.
In my view, we can take many other measures to address the air pollution problem. The government should give more financial support to build a well-developed public transport system. If there are easy-to-reach bus stops or subway stations, many citizens will choose to travel to and from work by bus or subway instead. High tax can also be imposed on people who use private cars frequently.
Overall, setting a car free day cannot achieve the desired outcome of deceasing air pollution. We should make other efforts to discourage people from using private cars, such as building a rounded public transport system.
点评：
1. 整个文章思路清晰，通顺，逻辑性强。虽然有一些语法错误，不影响拿7分。
2. 最大的问题其实是这个同学的结构去讨论了第一个立场的缺点，这是不恰当的地方，所以TR会扣分。
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